Date: 06 Mar 2014 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 78
FUCK...that is so NOT the way to have ended this story. Though it was tense & exciting to keep reading down to his response.
Damn....my nerves were jangling.
LOVED YOUR STORY....would love to see some kind of a sequel as to what happens to their lives.....& just 'maybe' their reinvolvement into the school.
Thanks so muches for sharing your story with me....
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Date: 05 Feb 2014 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 9: James - DAY 4
Good story but I kind of take issue with Carlisle constantly yelling. The kind of Dom who can make thousands per student at a school like this would never have to raise his voice even with the most unruly of trainees. If she had even a submissive bone in her body all he would have to do is use "The tone" of voice that will just make her bend. Don't get me wrong I get that unlike others here she didn't know what she was getting into, because James is a total douchebag and didn't give her a choice. But I take a small bit of offense at howw you are writing these supposidly professional Dominant/submissive trainers. Other then that it is an awesome story that I wish I could actually make myself get into reading, but I just get mad everytime you have Carlisle yell at her.
Date: 05 Jun 2013 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 8: Bella - DAYS 3 & 4
This is crazy. There is no way that Bella cannot have more control over herself. It is unrealistic. If a woman is afraid and in distress, there is NO WAY IN HELL that she could be able to get turned on and cum on top of it. I know that this fiction but come on. So not happening. I'm a little frustrated to tell you the truth.
Date: 05 Jun 2013 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 6: Bella - DAY 3 PART B
Why is Edward sucking of Carlisle any man for a matter of fact. Shouldn't he be with a mistress and not a master unless he is bi or gay. I don't see the reasoning behind putting him in such a scene!
Date: 12 May 2013 6:14 AM Title: Chapter 4: Bella - DAY 3 PART A
when she receives pleasure from something she hates and despises to have to be done to her that means james isnt the one she's meant to be .. whether being in that school was right or wrong for her , james is DEFINITELY wrong for her ~~
Date: 11 May 2013 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
can i please shake some sense into her .. i get that this is a fic but there are millions of Bellas like this one in the world .. it's one thing to enter such a world willingly and complete acceptance and to be forced into it like that ..