Date: 31 Oct 2012 10:33 PM Title: Rescue
Loved it! Can we get a future take please? I'm interested in what happened with the volturi, Jane as rose and Emmett's servant, the baby, Emmett's charges, etc.
Lol, you're not the only one who would like to have a sequel to this story, but unfortunately I invested a lot of time in it and didn't get quite enough incentive to continue it. If I got 3000-4000 reviews on FF instead of about 750, I would have gladly written a sequel, but not with less then 20 reviews per chapter... Sorry.
Date: 17 Aug 2012 12:47 AM Title: The training room
i cant read thia anymore im not trying to be rude but the way u talk about bella being and the way u are making her react are two different people and im finding it difficult to read this. as a person who is strong willed i can tell u i wouldnt have just sat there while a man tried to whip me and then not put up a fight when he lifts her over to the bed. she is a prisoner for gods sake shes juat gonna trust all these random men to touch her especially when she is a virgin.i think not.
You don't have to read this story let alone love it. Bella is in a state of shock ever since she's been kidnapped, and she doesn't know how to act and react anymore. And of course, as we all know, it was way more plausible in Master of the Universe that Bella accepted to be beaten by Edward and didn't stop him when she realized he went too far. It was so much more plausible that she started as a young innocent girl and knew how to make a bj at her first attempt, and that by the end of the story she was asking to be restrained and act as a submissive when at the beginning of the story she wanted nothing to do with that kind of behavior. But hey, I'm no popular writer so I guess if I unleash my imagination I can't do it my own way. Oh, and by the way, this story is to be taken second degree, there is nothing serious about it, so if you're trying to analyze all the doings of the characters, you won't find anything remotely credible. My inspiration to write my stuff is Manara. I suggest you go google him.
Date: 17 Aug 2012 12:24 AM Title: The harem
im sorry but i must say i find it a little hard to believe that bella would put up such a fight about getting undressed in front of a stranger and then not give a second thought to actually doing it and letting him was her...i am enjoying the story so farbut i feel that was a little out of character for her in this story. she is supposed to be strong willed and smart mouthed not silent and compliant.
Date: 22 Jul 2012 11:37 PM Title: Epilogue
Any future takes on the horizon?
I had a very pleasant time writing this story, and especially this epilogue, but I never reached enough people to get me motivated to write a sequel to this story.
Thanks for reading and reviewing :0)
Date: 18 Jul 2012 10:19 AM Title: Epilogue
I absolutely loved it! Had a hard time walking away to get anything done! I can't wait to read your others! Just so you know... I'm bad about reviewing. Sorry!
Then I guess a lot of people are bad about reviewing :0)
Thanks for taking the time.
Date: 16 Jul 2012 12:28 PM Title: Third day in Volterra
I'm loving it!
And I'm so impressed that you can write it in a second language! :)
Thank you for reading and reviewing my story. If I am not mistaken, sheviking and CaraNo write in English as well and it is not their first language either as they are from Denmark, so it is not so uncommon. However, I think I'm the only author with a bilingual page on FF :0)
Date: 15 Jul 2012 8:44 PM Title: Epilogue
It's always so sad to have to say good-bye to a good story, yours is extremely hard to say good-bye to. Thanks for sharing it with us, thanks for all the effort you put into writing and then translating it. It's double the work and it deserves to be recognized. So again, thanks. Please don't be a stranger!!!
It demanded me a lot of work translating it, but less so when I was just writing it, as I am a very blessed author who never suffers from the writer's block. I would just sit in front of my computer and type what was on my mind. I had the storyline for all the chapters so it was easy. But still, it took me 13 months to write the story and 26 months to translate it, so I guess I have a lot of patience and perseverance. That said, I am pleased that you ackowledge all the work I invested in that story, because it is truly colossal in terms of hours devoted to it. I'm not afraid to say that if the reviews we get were matching the time spent working on a story, I would have had much much more, but it is not the way it works and I have to accept it. I hope I will hear from you again and I think I will, at least on my story Collisions, which is far from over :0)
Date: 14 Jul 2012 1:06 PM Title: Epilogue
Thank you for finishing this story. It was wonderfully entertaining in every way, shape, or form. I wish that my French was not so rusty so I could read you other stories.
I've devoted myself to translation over the past year, so basically most of the stories on my page do exist in English as well, except for my sequel to Hunting Party, Bonjour Paris, which I have yet to translate.
Date: 01 Jul 2012 5:08 AM Title: Rescue
Oh, that was so good! I was so worried for the girls, but I should have known that Edward and his boys would save the day.
Ugh! Newton was such a loser; I'm not surprised that he didn't question Edward more than he did about what happened to Bella. Besides, Edward was so good at convincing the small minded idiot; I don't think he's smart enough to know the difference. I am glad that Bellas father isn't as bad as first thought, but he did still treat her rather shabbily, to say the least. I almost forgive him, since he gave Bellas hand to Edward, so they can get married! :o)
I loved this chapter so much! I'll be sad to see your story come to an end, but I've enjoyed it so, so much! I'll look forward to your epilogue. xoxo Kelly
I'm finishing typing the epilogue today, so hopefully my beta will send it back to me quickly :0)
Date: 27 Jun 2012 7:31 AM Title: Rescue
I am very thankful that you chose to translate this story from French to English. I have always said that I would wait months in between updates because I loved the story so much. Thank you for finishing it instead of abandoning ship.
Although sometimes I feel very depressed due to the drop in the numbers of reviews I get for that story, I never intended to abandon the translation, and right now I'm typing the epilogue, so it should be posted within 2 weeks.
Date: 23 Jun 2012 11:58 PM Title: Rescue
Thanks so much for not giving up on the story and us. To those who left, it was their loss.
Edward did things perfectly with Bella's father. He didn't lie, but hendidn'y go into too many details. Things are looking so much better for them now. Which is sign that the story is close to its end. :(
Date: 23 Jun 2012 5:16 PM Title: Rescue
Awesome chapter, loved it and this story is great. Glad Charlie saw that Mike was dispicable and agreed to Edward's proposal. I'm glad that I got to read this on my computer rather than my phone because the phone only lets me rate it with coffee cups and not do an actual review which is weird and don't know why that is. I've thoroughly enjoyed this story.
The epilogue is coming soon (2 weeks from now instead of a month)
Date: 12 Jun 2012 3:44 PM Title: Isabella Marie Swan, marquise de Courville.
et ou est la variation francaises???????je le veux!!!!!siltp...
Mais, Erika, je vais poster Indomptable esclave ici seulement si elle disparaît de l'autre site...
Date: 29 May 2012 9:42 AM Title: Freedom
Emmett and Jasper should have kept a better watch. There is always thieves and thugs on the roads. I have watched enough movies and read enough books to know this fact. Especially since the women were naked, the men should have been on high alert. I hope Carlisle gets back to them quick since they are not going to make there destination. Better yet, they need to figure a way out themselves since they got themselves caught in the first place. They got comfortable and forgot they were on the run.
Date: 29 May 2012 12:24 AM Title: Freedom
What a great chapter! But I had a bad feeling about one of the mercenaries not being found and killed by Emmett and Jasper, especially when Bella asked Edward about it and then forgot to ask Jasper about it later. I knew it! I feel like my head is going to explode!!! Now what? Where are they taking the four ladies? What about Edward going to see Bella's father? Not to mention Mike Newton.
It's all too much! I'll be dying until your next chapter! :o) xoxo Kelly
Right now, translating the two last chapters is my priority and I'm in the middle of chapter 44, which should be posted by the end of next week.
Date: 26 May 2012 12:14 AM Title: Freedom
Things just got complicated again. Hopefully Jasper and Emmett are just unconscious and will realize who attacked them. But how will they know where did they take the women?
If Newton did't go with Edward, how is Going to get there first?
At the beginning of next chapter (which is the last one before the epilogue), we will discover that Newton made the trip to Camargue with Edward...
Date: 08 May 2012 9:33 AM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 2
I'm on the edge of my chair, this is so exciting! I love that all their plans are coming together, so far. I'm freaking out a little about Lord Newton seeing Bella. I'm sure that pig will still want Bella even though she's not a virgin anymore. Or maybe not, I can't decide. I'm pretty sure Edward won't let anything happen to her, but still I'll worry. I can't wait to see what happens next! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter. xoxo Kelly
I will translate the three last chapters with as little delay as possible. I've put my other translation, Save the frog, on hiatus so I can finish Slave faster...
Date: 08 May 2012 8:29 AM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 1
You're awesome! I loved this chapter so much. It totally surprised me that one of the Volturi brothers is Jane's father. No wonder she is such a vile harpy. I've probably already said this but you write one hell of lemon. Hot! ;)
I'm off to have breakfast, then I'll be back to read chapter 42. :o) xoxo Kelly P.S. I'm so sorry for your loss, my thoughts are with you. xoxo
I received your reviews in the wrong order... I'm glad you like my lemons.Too bad they are still not good enough to get me a nomination for whatever award there is online. Oh well...
Date: 01 May 2012 7:36 AM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 2
Alec and Jane are sick creatures, but did they have much of a life. I am glad it was pretty easy for them to get everyone locked up, so they could leave. It is time to go.
Date: 27 Apr 2012 12:45 PM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 2
They are finally out of the castle. That doesn't mean out of trouble though. But it's a lot to have done and they have to be very proud of themselves. Hopefully some of the slaves will stay with them and help them through out the journey.
So we will meed Lord Newton, that will be interesting, but why won't Bella be very happy? I can't wait to find out.
Well, suppose Mike Newton still wants to marry her... I don't think that it will sit well with her...
Date: 27 Apr 2012 12:25 PM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 1
I have no clue why my review for this chapter didn't show. I began reading and realized I had already read it.
You read it on the FF site. That's where I've got your review.
Date: 26 Apr 2012 11:00 PM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 2
Their plans have come to fruition.
I worry about them making it out of the region before the volturi are alerted to the desertion.
Hope Jacob was able to convince all the male field slaves to be ready.
Now what do you have planned with sleezy Michael Newton?
Some funny sleazy comments to go with the little fucker :0)
Date: 04 Apr 2012 7:51 AM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 1
Jane is crazy, but I think it is in the genes. I am glad that Charlotte warned Bella and Rosalie. It shows that they have the trust and support of their fellow slaves. It is time for them to leave.
Date: 02 Apr 2012 9:01 PM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 1
Wow never saw that coming with Jane, excellent. So loving this story and always here whenever you can update. Sorry to hear about your mom and totally understand not wanting or feeling like writing.
Date: 02 Apr 2012 7:44 AM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 1
I send my condolences for the loss of your mother. I will pray for strength and perseverance for you and your family. I know how difficult the loss of a parent can be.
Thank you for using your talent as a writer to aid your grief. I appreciate your work.
Will Jane be detained long enough to allow their escape? I have a feeling James will be hot on their trail.
Jane will stay locked long enough for the slaves to escape. But what about James ? We'll know in due time...
Date: 31 Mar 2012 7:52 PM Title: Two lovers, ten prisoners, and one hundred freedmen, part 1
Wow, Jane is freaky crazy. Love this story. Can't wait until everyone get the chance to escape. I am so sorry for your loss. I could not even imagine having to go through that yet. God bless you.
Date: 20 Mar 2012 12:40 AM Title: The end of a reign of terror
Hi M! I loved this chapter so, so much! I especially enjoyed the three perv's punishment; I laughed my ass off! That was awesome, I'm still grinning! I just love your story so much! I'll be looking forward to your next chapter. xo Kelly
P.S. I hope everything in your life is going well. =)
Don't worry, the next update should arrive soon, the chapter 41 is in the hands of my beta :0)
Date: 01 Mar 2012 12:56 PM Title: The end of a reign of terror
This was such a good chapter. I am so glad that Rose and friends took care of the Voltari. They got what they deserved. It is so good that Bella is doing better than expected. It will be easier for her to travel.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'm starting the translation of the next chapter right about now. RL has been a bitch lately, and it's kind of hard for me to focus on my stories, but I'm still here.
Date: 08 Feb 2012 3:54 PM Title: The end of a reign of terror
The girls helping Rosalie with the brothers was a wonderful idea, and a great way for the girls to feel better and for the brothers to "experience" things from another perspective....
Things are about to strat, hopefully it all will run smoothly, and they all will be able to leave this horrible place. It has been a very long nightmare that has to end. Even if this ending means the ending of the story :(
There are still five chapters, so it's coming to a close, but not too fast...
Date: 06 Feb 2012 9:36 PM Title: The end of a reign of terror
I really look forward to your updates, sorry I don't review often enough.
I'm glad you took the time to send me a review. It means a lot to me. The less reviews an author receive, the more important each of them becomes. What is depressing when it comes to reviews, is not the number an author receives, whether it be 10 or 50 or 500, it is when there is a drop in the number of reviews, when an author gets an average of 20 reviews at first, and then after a while the number drops to 10. Authors who receive a lot of reviews to begin with won't see the difference if they lose a couple of reviewers, but an author who is less popular will be hit much more severely if the number of reviews drops.
Date: 06 Feb 2012 9:25 PM Title: The end of a reign of terror
Excellent chapter, loved Rose giving it to the Volturi. Everyone is spending their last night with their lovers just in case it's their actual last night. Sorry to hear that RL has been getting you down and things have been rough. I love this story and sometimes when I'm reading it from my phone I can't review other than to give the coffee cup rating. Don't know why that is, weird, but figure that at least giving some coffee cups is better than not doing anything.
Date: 06 Feb 2012 9:03 PM Title: Rosalie among the Volturi
Still here, its just hard to remember the story in betweeen updates. Good story tho
I can't imagine what it must be for all the readers of Bonne Foi...
Thanks for reading and reviewing :0)
Date: 06 Feb 2012 8:25 PM Title: The end of a reign of terror
I will wait until the cows come home for this story to finish!! It is well worth the wait. Up next, the big escape!!
Oh, we have have to give Rosalie a huge shout out for her wonderful work on the pigs of Volterra.
Thank you so much for sticking with me :0)
Date: 06 Feb 2012 4:31 PM Title: The end of a reign of terror
Don't stop with this story. I do care. I think it's great story.
I'm not going to stop, but it's hard to keep motivated with so little incentive, that's all...
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Date: 06 Feb 2012 1:06 PM Title: The end of a reign of terror
thanks for continuing!!!
Merci' - I think that might be right
Of course i'm continuing. I'm not a quitter, and it's not as if I could get the writer's block, lol.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Date: 06 Feb 2012 12:49 PM Title: The end of a reign of terror
First of all, thanks you for taking the time to translate this incredible story.
Second, I'm sorry to hear that so many things are dragging you down.
Third, I may not always review because I read mainly from my phone and reviewing is troublesome to say the least. But, take heart and know I thoroughly enjoy this story!
I'll be here waiting whenever you can pump out another translated chapter.
Go Rosalie, the lit candles in thier asses was hilarious.
It was hilarious indeed, and hopefully not too over the top. Boy, I had so much fun writing this scene in French more than a year ago :0)
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Date: 02 Feb 2012 10:52 PM Title: Rosalie among the Volturi
Well its about time those assholes of the Volturi got their payback for all the torture they put those girls through.
Next chapter should be posted very soon. It's being edited by my beta India Rose.
Date: 02 Feb 2012 7:13 PM Title: Deflowering Isabella
Well its about time that he deflowered her. I would have liked for it to be missionary so that they could see each other.
I think they will do the missionary later on, I'm pretty sure Edward will look Bella in the eyes at some point...
Date: 02 Feb 2012 6:48 PM Title: Edward and Bella
Oh wow that was a hot chapter. I hope the next chapter he will actually make love to her.
Oh my God, I thought you already read those chapters when they were published. I thought I sent you the chapter where Edward deflowers Bella...
Date: 14 Jan 2012 1:40 PM Title: Rosalie among the Volturi
i love this story! i stsrted reading it yesterday and have gotten through all you have yet, sorry i havent commented prior to but when i get going to dont want to stop until i have to! this is definatley one of those stories!
i feaking love rose!
i wondered how jasper and alice were gonna get together!
i knew edward would get to bella in time!
tanya is batty and her and jacob are perfect for each other!
until you post again, which i hope is soon!
I will try my best to update next week :0)
Date: 12 Jan 2012 2:32 PM Title: Rosalie among the Volturi
Hi there! Did you miss me? I would never flounce on you.
I loved this chapter so much! I was laughing like an evil woman just imagining what will happen to those three disgusting pigs. I can't wait to see how much damage Rosalie and the girls inflict upon the brothers. I look forward to your next chapter.
Actually,yes, I missed you :0)
I'm currently reading Slave in French (again) to relax while I'm translating Collisions... You're in for some hilarious moments in the coming chapters, lol...