Date: 29 Feb 2012 2:00 PM Title: 18. Death by Bling
great fic. hope there's more to come
Date: 16 Jul 2011 11:50 PM Title: 18. Death by Bling
Action packed again, but even more. Really well written, almost like watching it all happen in a movie.
Date: 16 Jul 2011 9:55 AM Title: 18. Death by Bling
thanks for having rose redeem herself.. too bad she couldn't do it before anyone got hurt. well you eased my mind knowing ed and bell got away from jessica. now they have to get out of there before it blows up!! can't wait for the end
Date: 16 Jul 2011 8:57 AM Title: 17. Operation: Retrieve Bomb Boy
oh man now my stomach is in a knot!!! wtf!!!
Date: 16 Jul 2011 8:48 AM Title: 16. Brain Matter
okay one sicko down more to go.. wow that quick you are ending that quick! wow!!
Date: 16 Jul 2011 8:41 AM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
oh boy are you going to kill the good guys? i am sooo worried
Date: 16 Jul 2011 8:15 AM Title: 14. Getting Things Rollin'
again the plot thickens more...
Date: 16 Jul 2011 8:05 AM Title: 13. I'm A Big Girl Now
don't hurt em too bad i am worried about him!
Date: 16 Jul 2011 7:55 AM Title: 12. Destruction and Disbelief
please save em don't hurt him too bad
Date: 16 Jul 2011 7:32 AM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
okay wow!! maybe bella is as crazy as renee!!! wow.. so how does jake know all that info? they knew she ws coming. there has to be a bug or something at the house.
Date: 15 Jul 2011 11:38 PM Title: 10. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 2
oh crap is right!!
Date: 15 Jul 2011 11:23 PM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
oh bella you are getting in deep.. wake up ed!!
Date: 15 Jul 2011 10:51 PM Title: 8. Mixing Business with Pleasure
oh the plot thickens... the two bad guys are united
Date: 15 Jul 2011 10:20 PM Title: 7. The Return of the Beast
well rose if you would have taking him out you wouldn't have to worry.
Date: 15 Jul 2011 9:47 PM Title: 6. Consequences
ojh my you are one tough bitch bella!!!
Date: 15 Jul 2011 8:55 PM Title: 5. Unexpected Circumstances
you are trying to kill him already? damn ouch!!!
Date: 15 Jul 2011 4:38 PM Title: 3. Meetings
intresting mix.... loompa is scary
Date: 15 Jul 2011 4:14 PM Title: 2. The Diner
is that her real age? she kina acts younger!
Date: 15 Jul 2011 3:57 PM Title: 1. Somewhere To Go
interesting... twist is ed with rose? what are they up to? alice blows things up? wow
[Report This]Date: 13 Jul 2011 11:20 PM Title: 18. Death by Bling
Woo! Go Rosalie! lol Well I was shocked there wasn't another chapter after this...for some reason when I started reading this I thought it was complete lol But anyways I loved it and I can't wait to read what happens next :)
[Report This]Date: 11 Jul 2011 5:08 AM Title: 18. Death by Bling
Pretty action-loaded this chapter. It seems that Rose is not that bad and only human when it comes to emotions, but in the end she made the right choices.
But it seems that everyone of the family has skeletons in their closets and somehow every skelet has some kind of revenge or personal vendetta against them.
Nice chapter, on with the next one.
Date: 28 Mar 2011 9:19 PM Title: 17. Operation: Retrieve Bomb Boy
Lauren? What? What did I miss? Her sister? And where the fuck is Edward?!
Date: 04 Mar 2011 6:38 AM Title: 17. Operation: Retrieve Bomb Boy
Loved it awesome can't wait for the nxt chapter
[Report This]Date: 27 Feb 2011 6:05 PM Title: 17. Operation: Retrieve Bomb Boy
i love it!! more!! thanks! where did Lauren come from anyway? she was never mentioned as a character before was she?
Author's Response:
Um....Lauren was only mentioned in the chapter where Jacob got shot. She wasn't named. And Rosalie spoke to Bella about her. LOL Does it help?
Date: 27 Feb 2011 9:47 AM Title: 17. Operation: Retrieve Bomb Boy
Man this gets more complicated by the chapter please udate soon!
Date: 27 Feb 2011 2:12 AM Title: 17. Operation: Retrieve Bomb Boy
No dont hide just update SOON...
Good story but slow to get updates
Date: 27 Feb 2011 12:51 AM Title: 17. Operation: Retrieve Bomb Boy
Great chapter! Can't wait to see how it all ends. :)
Date: 25 Jan 2011 1:18 AM Title: 16. Brain Matter
Loved it awesome go Bella can't wait for the nxt chapter
[Report This]Date: 24 Jan 2011 9:30 AM Title: 16. Brain Matter
Cool chapter. Even if it seems, that there is no hope for Bella, she finds a way out. I just hope she has enough bullets for the next one.
Her encounter with Jessica should be interesting.
Date: 23 Jan 2011 6:48 PM Title: 16. Brain Matter
Great chapter! I love the badass Bella has become. Can't wait to read what happens next. :)
Date: 09 Jan 2011 6:00 PM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
I think I'm only 98. Sorry. Loved the ch. I am impressed that B was so willing to throw herself in there full force. It was nice to see them open up to each other. Hope Em's holding up ok. Can't wait to see Jess get her ass kicked.
Author's Response:
I can't wait for write the actual showdown. I think it's been running around in my mind since I started writing this crazy stuff!
Neliz :D
Date: 09 Jan 2011 2:22 PM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
No dont stop. Five shots rang out..................... what happened their all good shots so they took them out. I would love to see Jess and Bells duke it out but i think Bells would probably go into some type of ptsd and cower. Never know. Love it please continue.
Author's Response:
LOL! They might...some might've missed.....and She could cower and hide but you never know, I'm full of surprises!!!
Neliz :D
Date: 06 Jan 2011 7:49 AM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
Loved it amazing can't wait for the nxt chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading! Next chapter will be posted later on tonight
Neliz :D
Date: 06 Jan 2011 1:12 AM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
FREAKING AWESOME!!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you!!
Neliz :D
Date: 05 Jan 2011 10:51 PM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
This is a good story, I just started reading a couple of hours ago and have finished what you have posted so far...I can't wait for the next update.
Author's Response:
Thank you soo much! The next chapter will be posted tonight!
Neliz :D
[Report This]Date: 05 Jan 2011 2:57 PM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
So much happened. To see the preparation for rescuing Emmett is like watching a clockwork. Everyone knows their jobs and stick to it.
It was cool that Edward is proud of Bella that she discovered the needed information.
The morning scene was funny, Bella screaming for Edward, Jasper and Rosalie ready to kill someone and Edward cooking.
This chapter was really exciting.
Author's Response:
Thank you...I thought I crammed too much info into one but I didn't want to cut it or anything. The next chapter will be posted sometime tonight.
Neliz :D
Date: 05 Jan 2011 11:51 AM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
oh shit... and it has begun. I can't wait to see the next chapter and see what is going to happend. I am also sooooo glad that edward finally pulled his head out of his ass and got together with bella!!!
Author's Response:
LOL...Thank you! The next chapter will be posted sometime tonight
Neliz :D
Date: 05 Jan 2011 12:59 AM Title: 15. Declaration to Conspire
wow it was about time that they made love. This was the first time right.? I hope I am not mistaken. ANyway I love it.
Author's Response:
Umm, no this is the second time. The first was when Bella round out about her mother...Thanx for reading!
Date: 20 Dec 2010 11:38 PM Title: 1. Somewhere To Go
Great story!! I loved Edward and Bella's first meeting and her little rants.. hilarious. cant wait to read more!
Date: 07 Nov 2010 1:23 AM Title: 14. Getting Things Rollin'
Loved it amazing stuff can't wait for the nxt chapter
Date: 06 Nov 2010 10:26 PM Title: 14. Getting Things Rollin'
Great chapter! I can't wait for the showdown between Bella & Jessica. :)
Date: 06 Nov 2010 6:03 PM Title: 14. Getting Things Rollin'
Good chapter...cant wait for the next
Date: 15 Oct 2010 4:15 AM Title: 13. I'm A Big Girl Now
Edwardooo needs a brain.
Author's Response:
He does, but he’ll get one soon enough. Thank you for your review!
Neliz ;P
Date: 14 Oct 2010 11:29 PM Title: 13. I'm A Big Girl Now
I hope that they can figure out where Emmett is before Jessica starts cutting off parts of him.
Author's Response:
They’ll find him that I can tell you. Now, how complete he’ll be I cannot. The chapter is done and will be posted tomorrow.
Neliz ;P
Date: 14 Oct 2010 10:56 PM Title: 12. Destruction and Disbelief
I think that Rose should have gone into the bank because Bella is dealing with alot of stuff in her head right now.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 10:18 PM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
Well that was quite a chapter! I am glad that Bella went in there and I really think that she just proved that she is willing to shoot someone to get information out of them.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 9:46 PM Title: 10. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 2
It is good that Bella is with people that can help her. I wonder what Jessica did to Renee and now Royce has Emmett!!
Date: 14 Oct 2010 5:24 PM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
Way to go Bella!!! There is something off about Jake though I think that he might be working with someone.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 5:00 PM Title: 8. Mixing Business with Pleasure
Oh! Royce is with Jess as in Bella's step-sister Jessica? That isn't going to go well because I think that if Bella sees her again she is going to snap and do more dammage than she did to Rose when she stabed her!
Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:19 PM Title: 7. The Return of the Beast
So Royce is going to try to go after Bella, Well good luck with that one because I don't think that she will take it without a fight or alone for that matter.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 3:05 PM Title: 6. Consequences
Well I guess that Bella has reached her breaking point. I am sad for rose that she has been lying to her family and that has cause her brother to be shot two times.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 2:25 PM Title: 5. Unexpected Circumstances
I really hope that Edward is going to be ok. And maybe Alice should give Bella a break and just talk and get to know her.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 1:41 PM Title: 4. Starting On Shaky Ground
Well that conversation didn't go well did it. I really hope that the girls warm up to Bella because something tells me that regardless of what Bella learns about what they do I don't think that she is going to go anywhere.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 7:12 AM Title: 3. Meetings
Well I think that first meeting could have gone worse...
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2010 6:57 AM Title: 13. I'm A Big Girl Now
Yes, Bella's all perfect. Edward sucks and his family's defending Bella. Bella has a right to throw a tantrum because she killed a man, yet Edward doesn't, even though he doesn't believe in torture. Does that even make sense?
Author's Response:
I want to thank you for taking the time to read my story. I’m sorry it wasn’t your cup of tea. I wasn’t expecting everyone to enjoy it. I don’t think Bella’s perfect. She has the flaws, to me they are obvious, but then again I’m the writer and I see her in a certain way. Edward’s tantrum had to do with how she did it. The way Bella killed Jake, reminded him of how he was hurt in the past. I even stated he was being bi-polar. He was confused. But once again, thank you. I always appreciate honest feedback.
Neliz J
Date: 14 Oct 2010 6:43 AM Title: 8. Mixing Business with Pleasure
Don't mean to be rude, but Bella's a f***ing Mary-Sue, 'cause she's all perfect, and smart, and all that sh*t.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:45 AM Title: 13. I'm A Big Girl Now
Loved it epically amazing can't wait for the nxt chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for all of your reviews. The fact that you gave me a comment for each and every one made my day. The next chapter will be posted tomorrow. I’m just putting the finishing touches.
Neliz ;D
Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:27 AM Title: 12. Destruction and Disbelief
Loved it amazing
Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:11 AM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
Epic loved it go Bella
Date: 14 Oct 2010 3:44 AM Title: 10. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 2
OME epic Emmett omg I hope he is ok
Date: 14 Oct 2010 3:19 AM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
Loved it amazing
Date: 14 Oct 2010 1:38 AM Title: 8. Mixing Business with Pleasure
OME that was epic
Date: 14 Oct 2010 1:17 AM Title: 7. The Return of the Beast
Epic stuff loved it
Date: 14 Oct 2010 12:20 AM Title: 6. Consequences
OME epic Rosalie is suck a bitch
Date: 13 Oct 2010 11:53 PM Title: 5. Unexpected Circumstances
OME epic poor edward
Date: 13 Oct 2010 11:28 PM Title: 4. Starting On Shaky Ground
OME epic loved it
Date: 13 Oct 2010 10:45 PM Title: 3. Meetings
Loved it go Bella she is feisty
Date: 13 Oct 2010 10:14 PM Title: 2. The Diner
Loved it loved edward
Date: 13 Oct 2010 10:11 PM Title: 13. I'm A Big Girl Now
Yay, a new chapter!!! :) So glad to be able to read more. High fives to both Jasper & Rose for supporting Bella for what she did to protect her new family. Hope you can update again soon!
Author's Response:
I am beyond amazed with your dedication to this story! Thank you! Thank you for reviewing on both sites! It’s readers like you that make me want to keep going. The chapter will be up tomorrow. I’m just adding the finishing touches to it.
Neliz ;D
Date: 13 Oct 2010 9:46 PM Title: 1. Somewhere To Go
Loved it
Date: 13 Oct 2010 9:22 PM Title: Prologue
Loved it interesting
Date: 13 Oct 2010 9:21 PM Title: 2. The Diner
It is probally a good thing that Edward and Bella met because she might have gotten into a whole bunch of trouble alone.
Date: 13 Oct 2010 9:03 PM Title: 1. Somewhere To Go
Well that was interesting....
Date: 13 Oct 2010 8:49 PM Title: Prologue
How terrible is it that she has to leave like that.
Date: 13 Oct 2010 8:12 PM Title: 13. I'm A Big Girl Now
GOOD JOB EDWARD!!!! FINALLY he is going to snap out of it. Love this story...
Author's Response:
LOL, Thank you! Yeah, this is all new to him. He's not used to having those feelings circulating his thoughts.The next chapter will be posted tomorrow. I’m just putting the finishing touches.
Neliz ;D
Date: 05 Oct 2010 8:53 PM Title: 4. Starting On Shaky Ground
good story
Date: 09 Sep 2010 5:38 AM Title: 12. Destruction and Disbelief
See? I'm not the only who was dumbfounded that she shot Jake. And, it was the way she did it. So glad E and I agree.
Author's Response:
LMAO I think she did what she had to in order to keep Edward safe. But I know, I was surprised too ;)
Date: 08 Sep 2010 11:17 PM Title: 12. Destruction and Disbelief
Thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading!
Date: 02 Sep 2010 11:17 PM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
Very nice.. :] I enjoyed that last part quite a bit.
Author's Response:
LOL, I really do love your reviews :D
Neliz
Date: 30 Aug 2010 10:52 AM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
what happened to chappy 10,11,12?
Author's Response:
I think there's something wrong with TWCS, this is not the only story that it's doing that too. The story is over on twilighted and FFn
[Report This]Date: 30 Aug 2010 8:45 AM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
This chapter was unexpected. First Bella has sex with Edward and than she shoots Jacob. But I don't believe that it is so easy to get to Royce, he will probably counting on something like what happened and place a trap for the Edward and the rest.
Bella was really tough, I guess now Edward starts thinking twice before he gives an order to Bella.
Author's Response:
Why do I feel like I'm disappointing you? I know she jumps a lot, she felt threatened.
Date: 29 Aug 2010 12:11 PM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
Wow well I think Bella went off the deep end. But Jake was pointing a gun at Edward so she had to do something.
Author's Response:
She felt protective of him. *wink*
Neliz
[Report This]Date: 29 Aug 2010 12:01 PM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
WOW! B or C, which every name she choose is a real bad ass. LOL
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 29 Aug 2010 11:19 AM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
Wow Edward is really being protective of her, but I think him not supporting her is going to get her hurt.
Date: 29 Aug 2010 12:57 AM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
Thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
Welcome ;D
Date: 28 Aug 2010 9:31 PM Title: 3. Meetings
Well that was interesting. Seems like the Cullen ladies have a bad temper. lol. I am glad that Edward stood up for her.
Date: 28 Aug 2010 8:21 PM Title: 1. Somewhere To Go
Well this is an extremly interesting story. I cant wait to see where you go with it.
Date: 28 Aug 2010 6:33 PM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
Holy fuck. She just killed someone!
Author's Response:
Yeah she did. I'm Sorry?
Neliz
Date: 28 Aug 2010 4:57 PM Title: 11. The Calm Before the Storm
Damn. Bella is badass while at the same time batshit crazy.
Author's Response:
Yes, yes she is. LOL. She's confused, angry and she feels used. Then you surround her with even more crazy people and this is the outlet she first sees so she takes it. Thanx for the review
Date: 20 Aug 2010 1:08 AM Title: 10. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 2
Oh my god!! You bitch!! A cliffhanger?! Erggg, haha, hurry and write a longer chapter.. it's getting good. :] <3
Author's Response:
LMAO Oh god!! LOL I think this is the funniest review I've had. No one ever really called me a bitch. You really made my morning. So Thank you! The next chapter is not that far off I promise. Though if you think I'm a bitch now, I hate to see what you'll call me next.
Neliz ;D
[Report This]Date: 19 Aug 2010 8:49 AM Title: 10. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 2
They talked!!! At least that was the only happy thing in this chapter. And Emmett is in danger, who would have thought. It was just a matter of time, until something like that happened.
It seems that somehow Bellas mom is now also involved or it was Jessica with a good disguise.
What keeps me thinking, is where was Rose. She was not at the house for dinner, perhaps she followed Emmett and will save him?
Until the next chapter!
Author's Response:
She was in the room, I just didn't mention it. I have a reason behind everything I write. Hopefully you would enjoy the way things play out from here on out.
Date: 16 Aug 2010 9:09 PM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
YYYYYYEEEESSSS!! HAHA!! :] Edward can suck it.. haha.. just kidding.. but quite fun.
<3
Date: 16 Aug 2010 9:40 AM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
Who knew she had it in her?
Date: 16 Aug 2010 9:10 AM Title: 8. Mixing Business with Pleasure
Jess? As in B's sister?
Date: 16 Aug 2010 8:28 AM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
Really enjoying this story, cant wait to read more.
[Report This]Date: 16 Aug 2010 4:15 AM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
Seems like, that they don't waste time to get going. I would have thought, that Edward would have been there at least to wish her good luck with the job interview. But now he will probably pretty pissed that Bella is going on a lunch date with Jacob.
You are very quick with the update, which is cool. Can't wait for the next one.
Date: 15 Aug 2010 8:53 PM Title: 9. Jealousy, Surprises, and Amendment, Part 1
Thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
My pleasure ;D
Neliz
[Report This]Date: 15 Aug 2010 4:22 PM Title: 8. Mixing Business with Pleasure
Oh my god is Royce a sick fucker. With Jess on his side he probably thinks he can get easy Bella. I just hope that Bella is strong enough for this confrontation and that Edward will help her through this.
Her idea of restealing the gold was golden ( ;-) ).
It seems that now the "whole" in the Cullen family will close and become perhaps more tighter with the addition of Bella.
Cool chapter.
Author's Response:
Royce is sick, but I think Jessica is worse.
I really enjoy reading your reviews, they truly mean a lot to me...
Neliz ;D