Date: 04 Dec 2013 4:58 PM Title: Bitter Fruit Part Two
I know this was written a while ago, but I just got into the Storm series. I finished reading Quiet Storm yesterday and am already on Chapter 16 of this one :)... I wanted to take a second to say that I freaking cried when Edward was talking to Aro in this chapter. I mean, how hard must it be to know your best friend doesn't remember you?? I lost it! Freaking lost it! I love this series, and I just wanted to stop and thank you for writing such a wonderful story!
Date: 24 Oct 2013 3:57 PM Title: Eclipse
Hello, I started with your first story "Quiet Storm" from a recommendation off one of the fanfic groups I'm in and I really enjoyed it. Now I'm reading the sequel and am enjoying it even more! I love the realism in the story is no matter how graphic it may be, you don't sugar coat it and that's just how real life is and I deeply respect that. Obviously I have a long way to go in the story but these previous chapters have been mind blowing especially these past few with Edward, his dream was so chilling but it was so clear I thought it was beautifully done. Also with his jealously towards Aro and him practically raping Bella, it's those emotions you don't wanna see but at the same time know you have to see if you wanna understand how these characters work. I personally can't stop reading and don't wanna stop reading. I haven't read any reviews because I have quite a ways to go with the story and I don't want any spoilers, but I do read your notes and see that some people don't like the way you portray these characters...well I say there jealous dumbassess who wish they could make these characters as real as you do. I say for them to get a life, because this is a work of fiction from a fictional story, your not perverting anything, if anything the flamers are because they wish they had half the imagination you do. I say screw em and keep up the good work! Can't wait to read more.
Date: 24 Oct 2013 2:55 PM Title: Chapel Bells
Poor Sonny, didn't have his Katie with him at the wedding. It would have been so nice for them to have all afternoon and evening together. I feel sad for Carlisle and especially Alex for probably losing their baby. That is just horrible. Alex is trooper keeping it together enough to be there for her new step children and being able to be happy on her wedding day when she is losing her first child in utero. Loved this story so much; I don't know if I loved this one more, or the first one? I think I will read Riders from Fan Fiction site. Thank you very much for sharing your writing and this story with us.
Date: 24 Oct 2013 12:23 AM Title: Now and Then
Enjoyed this one. Thanks. I really love when Edward and Bella are happy. I know they can't be all the time, but when they are... so am I. I really hope Sonny and Katie end up together and are just as much in love as Bella and Edward.
Date: 23 Oct 2013 10:28 PM Title: Well Enough
Oh boy no holds barred on the drama in this one. Bella and her mother both acted like white trailer trash there, oh and Lauren too, and Bella wasn't even drunk. Highly entertaining. Don't get me wrong, Renee deserves for her daughter to stand up to her, and she certainly deserved to get kicked out, but I don't see why Edward didn't defend his wife and send her home with Lou or someone... just get her out of there before she ruined the dinner party. Emmett really shouldn't have brought her in the first place since she was not invited and she was drunk, but anyway, that wouldn't have been nearly as lively though. I DO have to say though when Edward pulled Bella into the washroom and told her he loved her, "more than stars in the sky", it made me smile. That was a beautiful way to end the chapter. I do so love when they tell each other how much they love each other. That stuff just never gets old.
Date: 23 Oct 2013 5:21 PM Title: Logic
Kylie is so funny. I love that you include her paroting - humor - into the story. It really lightens each chapter, and some chapters really need that. I can't believe that sneaky Carlisle cheated Alex out of her birth-control. I also can't believe no one is reminding Carlisle that Esme's parents insisted on her marrying him and we all know how badly that turned out. Alex is pretty immature (doesn't know what she wants) and must have low self-esteem to stay with an abusive boyfriend before and now to allow herself to be railroaded into a marriage she doesn't know if she wants, and to quit her job just because her over-bearing parents, or is it her father who wants her to. Good story. Really enjoying it.
Date: 22 Oct 2013 11:36 PM Title: Days Like This
Love the silly drama that came up in this chapter about Lou wanting to tell the Skip about Aro and Bella. It was cute. Its funny because as light hearted as it was and the fact that Edward almost laughed at the silliness of it, it could have had a different outcome if Edward was in one of his dark moods. Thankful that you went the direction you did with him. I hope Lou doesn't get into any trouble? The one thing that hasn't come up at all these last few chapters about the drive-by is the fact that Edward was almost killed. Bella was upset about her child almost dying, but the execution was meant to be Edward's, and Bella was never fazed about that part at all. Her precious Edward, the love of her life was almost shot dead. I thought would come out of this situation, of Bella ignoring Edward and being mean to him would be the realization that Bella shut down from almost losing her Edward, and not being able to deal with that. But no she really wasn't upset by that fact at all. Now if I were Edward, that fact would have broke my heart.
Date: 22 Oct 2013 6:07 PM Title: Riders of the Storm Part One
I hope Edward does the right thing and takes care of the brother himself and if the Uncle has to go well maybe him too and leave the ones who actually did the drive by for Bella. That will be easier for her to handle. What is keeping Aro and Bella anyway? This chapter was really good... well they all are... even when I have a hard time with some of the things these charactors do.
Date: 22 Oct 2013 12:02 PM Title: Craft of the Father
Sure did not expect anything like this to happen. I hope they can figure out who is behind it. Some of the suspects it could be would have different targets, I think, like Mauro would have Carlisle, and Bella's brother might have Aro as a target...kill or be killed. It could be Elezar because Aro is more amenable to work with her and with her new associates. On another note... I hope Carlisle knows that Alex has been looking to move and applying for jobs elsewhere, to give him a chance to open up about how he feels for her and perhaps have her move closer to him... and tell his children about her. She could even move in with him... into a new house with the kids?
Date: 22 Oct 2013 1:30 AM Title: Thanksgiving
Someone needs to do something about Mauro's lying ass. I really hate how disrespectful Edward was to Dana... calling her terrible names in front of her daughter and mother in law too. Women really are treated disrespectfully by all these men... well except Bella. Sonny punched out a smaller boy wearing glasses, he should be ashamed of himself and his father should have told him as much. He could have just pulled AJ aside and told him he didn't fight him. Maybe shoved him into a wall and held him there, that would have shown AJ that he - Sonny, was stronger. Anyway, that went well. I sure don't trust Bella's new little brother, especially since his Uncle is connected to Jersey Mob.
Date: 22 Oct 2013 12:04 AM Title: That Thing You Do
Little disappointed that Sonny seems more interested in Alexandra than in his girl Katie. I know he is twelve going on fifteen and simply likes girls, a lot, but I hope he is not going to do anything with anyone while he is with Katie. I want him to be the faithful type. I don't care what age he is. On another note I wonder why Bella did not tell her kids about her other family coming to dinner? Very entertaining chapter.
Date: 21 Oct 2013 12:31 AM Title: Members Only
How sad that Carlisle killed Esme... but at least Aro didn't do it and neither did Anton...I don't think. I really hate that they would use him to kill a woman he has no beef with and then turn around and kill him as reward for his faithful soldier service. I mean, WTF! He would be incriminating himself as the murderer if he ever told anyone and really... what proof would there be anyway if he told anyone? I get it, sort-of...I don't have to like it though. I can't believe Nanny died too though? That was a surprise. I am worried for Bella's safety. I am worried that Carlisle is going to get paranoid about Bella knowing too much and have her killed too... or at least try to have her killed and then Edward finds out and kills everyone involved in the attempt to kill her. I don't know why Edward had to tell his brother that Bella knows about who killed Marcus. He is really too trusting of his brother sometimes.
Date: 20 Oct 2013 5:19 PM Title: Beach Blanket Bingo Part Two
Well Bella can't babysit Alex forever. If she is stupid enough to allow Carlisle to have his way with her well she doesn't deserve to have a nice relationship with Mauro... and doesn't love him enough to be faithful. Her flightiness is driving me crazy. I really don't know what Bella sees in her other than that it must make her feel young to have this young girl confiding in her like a new best friend. I am so homesick for the beach from reading the last two chapters. Love how romantic Edward is with Bella. Please have Bella convince Edward not to kill Esme. Please! I know I am talking to myself here since, you have finished the story already and because I don't think you read these reviews. Anyhow....
Date: 20 Oct 2013 12:53 AM Title: Fight Club Part One
I loved this sweet and sappy chapter so much. I was expecting it to be killing Esme and Uncle Swan, but that's not until the next chapter... well the uncle at least. It brought back memories for me of when I had bad dreams at night and my mother used to do the same thing with the flashlight under my bed and in my closet. Thanks for the memory. Some pretty great parenting from Edward again.
Date: 20 Oct 2013 12:08 AM Title: Fight Club Part Two
I had to skim this one. It was really too much pain and suffering for me. I really don't get why Edward made Anton fight like that... I mean he got beaten up pretty bad too, and he had no choice in the matter. Anyway.
Date: 19 Oct 2013 11:39 PM Title: Requiem for a Dream
I could really relate to Edward and Bella really when they were having their domestic argument. I love how coming together took his anxious knot away. I don't like that he is going to have Esme killed, and I especially don't like that he is sending Aro to do it. That is just so cruel to be sending Aro... for both of them. It somehow makes me feel better to know that Edward is going as well, but only if that means he will be the one to do the killing.
Date: 19 Oct 2013 10:17 PM Title: Voices Carry Part Two
Good chapter. Good parenting on Edward's part, taking care of Karli, and not getting mad at Sonny when Karli fell off the change table, when he realized it was his mistake. When will Sonny be 12? It seems like his has been 11 for about 5 years already! Just kidding. Poor Esme. Poor Esme's kids. Sad. Really sad. I wish she would just take off somewhere.
Date: 19 Oct 2013 9:34 PM Title: Voices Carry Part One
I was thinking the same thing as Aro... now Damion and Sandino can become a part of the other family...now that they are fully Italian. I sure hope Edward leaves it alone... the whole Aro and Bella thing.
Date: 19 Oct 2013 4:44 PM Title: Great Adventure
I wondered if Bella was not fathered by Charlie... that would explain why Charlie was always so hard on her, especially when he was close with Emmett and Alice too. Great chapter. I really hope Edward leaves Carlisle and Esme alone.
Date: 17 Oct 2013 10:55 PM Title: NuMb
I am relieved that Carlisle let Esme leave, and that they did not torture Lenny before they killed him. I am also satisfied that at least Carlisle and the others too know that there is something a little off with Edward.
Date: 17 Oct 2013 3:13 PM Title: Breaking Dawn
I have to say even though you want to portray Edward as being an arrogant, self-possessed, controlling and ruthless man when he is working, I really think he seemed more like a psychopath tonight. He enjoyed being needlessly cruel to his victims, and it even turned him on. His coworkers as ruthless as they can be too... were even shocked. I really do not believe it would be possible for Edward to be both this insane man and a loving husband and father. This is fan fiction though so I guess anything could be possible, but in reality, if this was real life, I just don't think the two exstremes could be present in the same person. Anyway...maybe that is where you are going with this story, that Edward completely loses touch with his humanity...and his sanity?
Date: 17 Oct 2013 12:37 PM Title: Aro's Daycare
Good chapter. I feel bad for Charlotte...her Aunt hitting on her date/crush, and Aro going for it. I like how you explained it though, that Charlotte fell for Aro the sweet guy before he got his memory back, and had nothing in common with or attraction for the real Aro. Still, the Aunt probably should have cleared it with Charlotte before throwing herself at him. I wonder if that is what it is like when you have amnesia... are you really that different, is your personality innocent and your old mannerisms wiped?
Date: 16 Oct 2013 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 22
Great chapter. I read your author's note, and I must confess I am/was confused about some of the things Aro was saying to Edward after the fight Aro had with Valente. It sounded like Aro was talking about how much Bella meant to him and that he was angry with Edward for not protecting her from being exposed to the likes of his cousins, and defending her honor. To me Aro went too far - not fighting the guy, (assuming he killed him by accident) - with what he said to Edward. I am surprised Edward didn't kill him. I mean there is still some bad blood between them over Bella. Bella really needs to get her own friends, and leave Edward's Capos alone. I know that is easier said than done. Too bad Alice and Leah and Rose live so far away. At least they are a little closer now, but still.
Date: 16 Oct 2013 5:18 PM Title: Blondie
The suspense in this story is building and I love it. I feel sorry for Esme, but she is a bit of a lose canon and her back is up against the wall. I don't know that they have much of a choice what to do with her... unless they can get her some professional help in like another state far away. I don't know. I am thrilled that Edward believed Aro, and that Edward is letting Carlisle decide Esme's fate.
Date: 16 Oct 2013 4:13 PM Title: Too Many Movies
I just knew it was Esme! Well I didn't know from the beginning but when Luke had no idea who did it and then Enzo didn't know the person Scott got the money from I wondered if it could be Esme. Then when he said it was a woman I couldn't wait to find out I was right. I wonder did she mean for Scotty to kill Carlisle and Anthony too? I don't think so...probably just meant for Candice to be taken out, so she could have Anthony and Carlisle. I wonder if she would have picked Aro over Carlisle if he made a play for her? She would have been happy if Carlisle would have been faithful to her. She just wanted to feel desired...loved. Anyway, great chapter. Thanks.
Date: 16 Oct 2013 3:06 PM Title: A Tight Fit
Sorry to hear about your woes concerning writing this story and some of the reviews you recieved for some of the chapters. I am really enjoying reading it and think your writing is very smart, and has an authenticity to it that I think you were going for and succeeded with. I loved this chapter...I loved the kids and how Damion has welcomed Anthony into the family. The kids especially are going to miss each other, camping out for three weeks and soon to be five, or six weeks when it is all said and done.I hope they stay close, and visit often. Maybe Carlisle will move to the same area after he finds a place of his own. I know that he will be living at Edward's old apartment for a while. I wonder how Aro is doing? I wonder why Esme and the girls were left in the city...why were they not in danger too? I hope they are o.k. I am still surprised that Edward took Bella to his dinner with John and the Jersey boys... putting her in potential danger like that, but still it was interesting and sure did not expect how it all turned out. As for the Viagra... well I think it was smart, because it got him over whatever he was going through - the guilt. He still could have refused her even with his "temporary condition", but he didn't and now "all is well that ends well".
Date: 16 Oct 2013 9:01 AM Title: Eclipse
Well the visits went better then I expected. I am so relieved that Aro has his memory back and that Edward and Aro talked everything out. I wonder will Bella add Esme to the visitation list? Great chapter. I wonder what you have planned for this truce between John and Edward? Will it be just a show, or will it be what Bella suggested to Edward a while ago and Edward will take him out when he least expects it? I bet until he does there will be a cold war between them and no one will be safe. Thanks.
Date: 15 Oct 2013 10:53 PM Title: Bucked Up
I am shocked by Edward wanting to keep Bella with him. How can he keep them safe? I sure hope no one follows the family to Plattsburg. Poor Anthony being sent away with almost strangers. He has met his grandfather once? Twice? He is being comforted by his Aunt.
Date: 15 Oct 2013 2:16 PM Title: Thou Mayest
Excellent. I hope Aro and Esme get together for real. They both deserve to be with adults who will be faithful to them. It appears they may have been in love for a long time. I sure hope this doesn't lead to Carlisle killing them?
Date: 13 Oct 2013 2:16 AM Title: The Light
I just wanted to say that I absolutely adore your writing. I’ve loved reading quiet storm and now weather the storm. I’m actually so sad I’ve nearly finished this story, as then there is only one sequel left to read then that’s it.
The relationship between Bella and Edward is so beautifully written, it’s been a joy to read and see them develop and stay so committed to each other…also is it silly that I kind of have a crush on this Edward haha?
Quiet storm and weather the storm are the best stories I have ever read on this site! You have easily become my favourite author and I can’t wait to read more.
It really has been a pleasure to read these stories and I’ve loved everything you’ve done to the characters. Your writing is believable in the context of the story so please ignore all the negative Nancy’s out there :P
You are brilliant and I will miss this story so much when I’ve finished it. Thank you so much for continuing this amazing story and I look forward to what you come up with in the future!
Date: 12 Oct 2013 2:57 PM Title: Rolling in the Deep
my family thinks I am crazy screaming about characters in a story lol! Little do they know this is a bad ass story lol! My old man knows I have read it before and says your writing style must be amazing since you can get that type of reaction....again lol! Love the skip!
Date: 12 Oct 2013 1:17 AM Title: In Like Flynn
Edward seems to be taking well to this parenting gig. He's doing a great job if you ask me...at least so far. I agree someone... Bella and Edward need to explain to him a few things about relationships, fooling around, having sex, how to treat a girl/woman and at what age. Can you imagine what he may have tried with Katie? Someone needs to educate this boy a little more about such things. Great story. It doesn't feel repetitive at all. There is just so much real life for these guys to tell.
Date: 30 Sep 2013 8:41 PM Title: Riders of the Storm Part Two
I felt so many things for so many people in this chapter.
Edward - Sad, angry, happy, disappointed and then sad again
Aro - happy, sad, proud
Bella - sad, angry, angry, angry, angry, releived, sad and disappointed. I keep having to tell myself, she can't see into her husband's mind like we can, but...still.
So much going on here.
Date: 25 Sep 2013 11:00 PM Title: This Time Around
I love that Edward didn't fly off the handle. In the last story when Carlisle told Bella he was in love with her and he was positive Edward knew, I really wondered if he did. This chapter just basically confirmed that he not only knows, but is so aware he can see things that others can't.
"-his own Bella-model-"
Date: 25 Sep 2013 7:59 PM Title: Come Hell or High Water: Part Two
When I was a kid, my grandfather used to give us kids wine every holiday after dinner before bed.
That being said, I come from a family of rum heads...so yeah.
Hate on Edward for giving Sonny wine...no. To each is own.
Date: 23 Jul 2013 4:12 AM Title: Craft of the Father
This chapter had me in tears! It's 4 in the morning so I can't exactly get too loud but I was in tears! You did a wonderful job with this chapter and I really love this story. I hope Skip gets whoever did this and gives Bella her 10 mins with them. Son y is a trooper. Reminds me so much of Edward.
Date: 23 Jul 2013 12:16 AM Title: That Thing You Do
This kids...OMG! They make me worry about mine. lol But seriously, they are so young. Don't need to be thinking or doing that. Damn. I seriously thought Alex was going to slap Sonny. lol That would have been great...but then try explainning that to Bella and Edward. HAHAHA
Date: 21 Jul 2013 12:58 PM Title: Chapter 22
I hope Edward and Aro can fix their relationship. I know they are like brothers and I just want to see it like the way it use to be between them. And I hope Carlisle clips Esme. She deserves it. She a threat and needs to be dealt with.
Date: 21 Jul 2013 5:35 AM Title: A Tight Fit
Wow! I keep reading your A/N's and I keep thinking if people don't like the story then why are they reading it? In my opinion you are just writing about things that are true and things that happen in real life. Shit happens, it doesn't mean you are trying to glorify it. You're just trying to tell a story that you have in your head. And writing is a great therapy. So far I love this story. Thank you for sharing it...even if its brought some negative your way.
Date: 07 May 2013 10:27 PM Title: A Tight Fit
I dont know if you still read your reviews but i just had to let you know how AWESOME i think you are! Your story is AMAZING and im so sorry you have gotten terrible reviews. I for one can not put your story down.y husband has even fussed at me because i was reading in the theater before iron man 3 came on. Apparently i was supposed to be spending time with him lol. You write in such a way that i dont feel like im reading about twlight chatscters and i mean that as a compliment. You have made these characters your own and its brilliant. So i say fu** those that dont like it. This south carolina girl LOVES IT!
Date: 07 Apr 2013 4:43 PM Title: A Tight Fit
I can't even begin to describe how much of an amazing writer you are! I've been absolutely hooked on this story and of course quiet storm! Seriously, you have simply blown me away with this story and all the twists and turns you use are simply amazing. I plan to read all your stories, I just can't get enough of them. You have definitely inspired me :)
Date: 27 Mar 2013 5:21 PM Title: Come Hell or High Water: Part Two
Do you say stuff like that to get attention ("this story has a slow start. Have faith in me")? This is anything but a slow start. This story is marvelous, and how can you not love their kids. Sonny is great and smart, Damian is silly and funny and Kylie is just adorable. I'm going to have to read slower so I can savor it all.
Date: 24 Mar 2013 1:51 AM Title: This Woman's Work
I have no idea if I reviewed this when I first read it, but I'm into it just as much as the first time......this story caused me to see the sun come up more than once because I could not stop reading and go to bed........love your Skip
Date: 22 Feb 2013 7:26 AM Title: Part 3 Announcement
This has been my umpteenth time reading this trilogy & I find something different each time to enjoy, laugh at or a character I wish I could bitch slap.
I admire your talent very much. Thank you for selflessly sharing it with us.
Date: 21 Feb 2013 11:37 AM Title: Thou Mayest
Well, I'm sdo sorry for Aro, he is really broken about that lauren bullshit.
Well, and Casrlisle - after reading so much of Whorlisle, I still have Problems understanding him. I did read that outtake about gail, and now with Candance it seems to be the same shit - and he always says he loves them all! Thats not possible! I always hope he will change - like his Father did, but only after Woman No 3, so maybe it will also take like 30 Years....
And Esme? well, in quiet Storm I did feel sorry for her - but now? Not so anymore.
She knows he cheates on her, but she's doing the same (or wants to) , but still she wants another child? To me, she's just some brat, feeling sorry for herself! And taking Amnthony from his Mother, just so she can get her son? Woah, What? Thats kind of sick!
After her daddy died, she did had a possibility to divorce, Carlisle would have let her. But no, she wants his money and his kids, but please, not the hubby staying in his brother's buiseneess---
And now she tries again with Aro? That man is only sorry because his marriage broke - but why the hell did he have to call her? And now, I'm realls frightened for his life.
Well, at least Edward and Bella are happy in their own crazy way - and even if I think its funny but caotic how they raise their children, they do love each other and their kids - and so it will work.
Date: 06 Feb 2013 10:07 PM Title: Long Day
She is fucking annoying!!!!! Honestly, it's like she wants the man to just be in her ass 24/7 and it's really pissing me off. She is soooo fucking needy. DAMN!!!!!! How much more does the man half to do. She know's the life fuck give the man a break. She just nags, nags, nags, all the fucking time. Sorry for the language but she's annoying!
Date: 06 Feb 2013 3:34 AM Title: Come Hell or High Water: Part Two
Omg....I am enjoying these two and their kids!!!! This has me just cracking up! I LOVE Edward and his parenting....between the porn and the wine this has me snorting out loud....truly loving this....